Afternoon, Rosaline’s backyard: enter Romeo Romeo: O Rosaline, thine eyes as blue as a summers sky, thine hair, gold as the sun upon a face of Aphrodite’s complexion. Rosaline, who my heart yearns, where art thou? I cannot live without the sight of my sweet Rosaline.
Enter Rosaline
Rosaline: Romeo o Romeo, thou art a faithful Pet ever returning to the subject of your passionate soul. You will remain a dear friend for evermore, and I do love thee in this way, but you will never find what you are truly looking for in me. The sadness in your eyes cripples me, yet My conviction remains steadfast, we will Never be united two in one.
Romeo: You have Diana’s wit, can you not see Destiny would us be together. Did thou not feel the spark which lovers feel When their eyes meet for the first time. Surely you feel for me as I do for you.
Rosaline: I would see the sun’s flames put out before Breaking your heart, but my devotion is with God. My liveliness is with the Church. This is my true destiny, I am sorry.
Voice inside: Rosaline, Rosaline, supper is ready!
Rosaline: Farewell Romeo.
Exit Rosaline
Romeo: What god condemns me to this suffering?
My aching heart will never be fulfilled.
This cavity in my life is a pain
greater than death itself.
Exit
Boston_Red_Sox:
Line 7: Pet dosent seem to fit in very well... just sounds off to me in the mood Roseiline is talking in.
Last Line: Death is sweet? If you are going to use this metaphor explain it more, because you are talking about water quenching your heart and i have no idea how sugar or sweetness is related to this.
Other than that this is really amazing! I honestly feel like i am reading the actual play with all of the great imagery and the awesome vocab. You might want to separate each persons lines because its a little confusing to tell when Romeo's line ends and Roseiline starts speaking.
LOVE all the the metaphors! They are all really good! Great job :)
NewYorkYankss
I really liked it, But also I agree with Boston-Red-Sox, that the last line is a bit random, you could change it to the death of love is sweet or bittter sweet instead.
TorontoBlueJays
Afternoon, Rosaline’s backyard: enter Romeo
Romeo: O Rosaline, thine eyes as blue as a
summers sky, thine hair, gold as the sun upon
a face of Aphrodite’s complexion.
Rosaline, who my heart yearns, where art thou?
I cannot live without the sight of my sweet Rosaline.
Enter Rosaline
Rosaline: Romeo o Romeo, thou art a faithful
Pet ever returning to the subject
of your passionate soul. You will remain
a dear friend for evermore, and I do
love thee in this way, but you will never
find what you are truly looking for in me.
The sadness in your eyes cripples me, yet
My conviction remains steadfast, we will
Never be united two in one.
Romeo: You have Diana’s wit, can you not see
Destiny would us be together.
Did thou not feel the spark which lovers feel
When their eyes meet for the first time.
Surely you feel for me as I do for you.
Rosaline: I would see the sun’s flames put out before
Breaking your heart, but my devotion is
with God. My liveliness is with the Church.
This is my true destiny, I am sorry.
Voice inside: Rosaline, Rosaline, supper is ready!
Rosaline: Farewell Romeo.
Exit Rosaline
Romeo: What god condemns me to this suffering?
My aching heart will never be fulfilled.
This cavity in my life is a pain
greater than death itself.
Exit
Boston_Red_Sox:
Line 7: Pet dosent seem to fit in very well... just sounds off to me in the mood Roseiline is talking in.
Last Line: Death is sweet? If you are going to use this metaphor explain it more, because you are talking about water quenching your heart and i have no idea how sugar or sweetness is related to this.
Other than that this is really amazing! I honestly feel like i am reading the actual play with all of the great imagery and the awesome vocab. You might want to separate each persons lines because its a little confusing to tell when Romeo's line ends and Roseiline starts speaking.
LOVE all the the metaphors! They are all really good! Great job :)
NewYorkYankss
I really liked it, But also I agree with Boston-Red-Sox, that the last line is a bit random, you could change it to the death of love is sweet or bittter sweet instead.
But aside from that I really think its good!